03-10-2014, 04:49 PM
I enjoy the imagery in the beginning, but the rest of the poem is quite confusing and I'm having trouble getting a full message behind this, besides the fact that it seems to be about two lovers.
I would also suggest using only one metaphor about life- you use three different ones consecutively. Pick one that you feel ties best into your poem, it will be more significant that way.
I would also suggest using only one metaphor about life- you use three different ones consecutively. Pick one that you feel ties best into your poem, it will be more significant that way.