03-10-2014, 11:07 AM
Come, because the life is we,
Found ourselves in a dark wood.
The comma splices confuses me, so I'm not sure what certain lines mean. The repetition of come is intriguing but I don't understand the connection of the title with the poem. It seems you wrote this in a hurry because grammatically there are errors like "tomorrow we will turn/
In a couple of cold stones." which unfortunately is distracting. Also I don't get how life is a ring, hellish wheel. You might want to delve into that metaphor further, or not at all
Is this a translation?
Found ourselves in a dark wood.
The comma splices confuses me, so I'm not sure what certain lines mean. The repetition of come is intriguing but I don't understand the connection of the title with the poem. It seems you wrote this in a hurry because grammatically there are errors like "tomorrow we will turn/
In a couple of cold stones." which unfortunately is distracting. Also I don't get how life is a ring, hellish wheel. You might want to delve into that metaphor further, or not at all
Is this a translation?