03-10-2014, 04:13 AM
(03-10-2014, 03:59 AM)justcloudy Wrote: Thanks for the thoughts milo! Honestly I didn't find it very easy to follow ella's poem because I wasn't sure exactly what her story was (and from her comments above apparently she wasn't totally sure either, hehe). I don't usually write with meter and rhyme thus some of the clunkiness and unnecessary words, but this one was just begging for it, so I succumbed. Not making excuses though, and some of the things you pointed out are now embarrassingly and glaringly obvious. But as ella said, this was a great exercise that put the more inexperienced of us shoulder to shoulder with some great poets, (I mean c'mon, justmercedes' followed mine...) but without evoking any feeling of inadequacy. Very cool. Looking forward to the next one, and being able to contribute something a little more polished. =]
-justcloudy
I don't think it is an easy task to follow anyone. Also, there were only 48 hours so the assumption is that they were all drafts. Half the fun is the commenting and revising afterwards!
I think you did fine, btw, I rushed mine and made a ton of mistakes - I am just waiting for some observant PigPenner to point them out.