A House in Autumn

[heslopian]

Thank you for your helpful and thoughtful feedback, Erthona! I take your point about "doe"; the line reads amateurishly to me, anyway. I don't personally see a problem with the pluralities in L3 to 5; whenever a glass frame or tile is shook by wind, it disturbs the lost victims, making them scream. I'll read them again more thoroughly once I've finished this. The poem is about two teenagers making out in a haunted house when the boy sees a bit of gore on his girlfriend's shoe, screams, startles her, then sees that the gore is gone. I'm afraid I inserted no depths beyond that rather cheesy slasher plot