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A House in Autumn
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03-05-2014, 08:38 AM
Thank you for your thoughtful and helpful feedback, fresample! I agree with you that bulking up is needed, probably in spades. Thank you for recognising some of the syntactical flaws; I do struggle with meter, though thankfully I'm not as "melt-your-eyes-out" awful as I was when I was 15
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-05-2014, 06:51 AM
RE: A House in Autumn - by fresample - 03-05-2014, 08:32 AM
RE: A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-05-2014, 08:38 AM
RE: A House in Autumn - by jeremyyoung - 03-05-2014, 08:39 AM
RE: A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-05-2014, 08:45 AM
RE: A House in Autumn - by Erthona - 03-05-2014, 01:56 PM
RE: A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-05-2014, 11:32 PM
RE: A House in Autumn - by Erthona - 03-06-2014, 05:14 PM
RE: A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-06-2014, 08:24 PM
RE: A House in Autumn - by ChristopherSea - 03-06-2014, 08:54 PM
RE: A House in Autumn - by heslopian - 03-07-2014, 11:50 AM
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