03-05-2014, 06:23 AM
Jeremy,
Yes, but that is one of my problems, I write accentual verse very easily. I like to try and keep my chops up on the major forms (even if I don't like them) just to strengthen my skills. I usually don't have quite this much trouble with a sonnet. It is in iambic pentameter, but a number of the phrases are awkward and/or confusing. It is also lacking in clarity. I could easily drop it into accentual verse, but that would defeat the purpose of the exercise. I could take the easy way out, but that would nor help me improve. Thanks again for your input, keep it coming, I have a thick skin, it does not bother me if you re-write the whole thing, sometimes that is the easiest way to make a point.
Thanks again,
Dale
Yes, but that is one of my problems, I write accentual verse very easily. I like to try and keep my chops up on the major forms (even if I don't like them) just to strengthen my skills. I usually don't have quite this much trouble with a sonnet. It is in iambic pentameter, but a number of the phrases are awkward and/or confusing. It is also lacking in clarity. I could easily drop it into accentual verse, but that would defeat the purpose of the exercise. I could take the easy way out, but that would nor help me improve. Thanks again for your input, keep it coming, I have a thick skin, it does not bother me if you re-write the whole thing, sometimes that is the easiest way to make a point.
Thanks again,
Dale
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The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.