03-04-2014, 02:01 AM
cidermaid,
cidermaid,wrote:
"If I have one more un-informed and un-supported "scientific fact" delivered with that smug know it all smile, from yet another nappy wearing, shiftless, parasite"
Yes that is a very good encapsulation.
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I used bide because it indicates the person is doing even less than when waiting, especially intellectually. That it created such an offal/awful rhyme was simply serendipitous.
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"they’ve never seen death, nor begged for salvation." basically they've lived a privileged life. A bit of facetiousness there.
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"learned" was meant as a pun, as it can be pronounced two different ways and each carries different meaning. Of course the learn-ned way was meant ironically. However I do like regurgitate.
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"whisper" was also used ironically, unfortunately the only the clue of that is the "Yet they’ll". That's my fault, as well as some of the others, I often end up being too subtle for my own good. Obviously if no one is getting the joke, you are not telling it very well. SO I probably need to do some tinkering. Maybe use something like "as they proudly whisper..."
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Anyway, thanks for the feedback, it was very helpful, as well as insightful.
Thanks again,
Dale
cidermaid,wrote:
"If I have one more un-informed and un-supported "scientific fact" delivered with that smug know it all smile, from yet another nappy wearing, shiftless, parasite"
Yes that is a very good encapsulation.
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I used bide because it indicates the person is doing even less than when waiting, especially intellectually. That it created such an offal/awful rhyme was simply serendipitous.
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"they’ve never seen death, nor begged for salvation." basically they've lived a privileged life. A bit of facetiousness there.
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"learned" was meant as a pun, as it can be pronounced two different ways and each carries different meaning. Of course the learn-ned way was meant ironically. However I do like regurgitate.
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"whisper" was also used ironically, unfortunately the only the clue of that is the "Yet they’ll". That's my fault, as well as some of the others, I often end up being too subtle for my own good. Obviously if no one is getting the joke, you are not telling it very well. SO I probably need to do some tinkering. Maybe use something like "as they proudly whisper..."
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Anyway, thanks for the feedback, it was very helpful, as well as insightful.
Thanks again,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.