03-03-2014, 02:10 PM
Thanks Jeremy,
It certainly reads more clearly, unfortunately it is no longer in iambic pentameter, and as this is a sonnet...
But that is exactly the problem I've been having with this also, I think I have an answer, then realize it is no longer in the correct meter, or I've blown the end rhyme.
Thanks for the input, I amy be able to use some of it as I reformulate.
Dale
It certainly reads more clearly, unfortunately it is no longer in iambic pentameter, and as this is a sonnet...
But that is exactly the problem I've been having with this also, I think I have an answer, then realize it is no longer in the correct meter, or I've blown the end rhyme.
Thanks for the input, I amy be able to use some of it as I reformulate.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.