nursery rhyme

[geoff]

Hey Dale,

Enjoyed the poem; I felt it was a relatable topic. The line "all one needed was to show up and bide" felt a bit forced to me, but for what it was, the rest seemed pretty appropriate and well worded. Agree with shem's first comment it doesn't quite reach the pitch of anger; taken as a nursery rhyme though, I wouldn't really expect it to and it never struck me as the goal.

Thanks for the read

-geoff