03-01-2014, 09:57 AM
Chris,
When I changed it from "it" to they I forgot to change "flees" to "flee" Good catch.
I am ambivalent about a comma:
"Conspire they will, the scalpel to evade,"
It has the effect of slowing it down, instead of rushing right through, however, I can think of no grammatical reason to choose one over the other. I guess it is a good place for a caesura.
Thanks for the continued feedback. I think we nearly have the first four lines down
Only ten more to go!
Dale
When I changed it from "it" to they I forgot to change "flees" to "flee" Good catch.
I am ambivalent about a comma:
"Conspire they will, the scalpel to evade,"
It has the effect of slowing it down, instead of rushing right through, however, I can think of no grammatical reason to choose one over the other. I guess it is a good place for a caesura.
Thanks for the continued feedback. I think we nearly have the first four lines down
Only ten more to go! Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.