02-26-2014, 09:45 AM
Dale, I appreciate your careful read and sage suggestions on this little experiment. Especially, for catching that error I made while switching lines between two stanzas, thereby losing track of the 'her's. I edited far too quickly in my response to some of Geoff's concerns.
Always feel free to rearrange poetry lines as a critiquing method. I find it the best way to get points across and to suggest alternate edits. In fact, I may make that same one that you demonstrated. The rhyme recommendation is a good one, at least with what you did. I will need to iron out the free verse version first. It will take me time, but I will give it a whirl.
Your 'planting season' really got my chlorophyll pumping, so I decided to try and compose a poem with a plot (pun intended) from various flower/plant names. I am glad that you liked the idea. Thanks much for your time and efforts with this! I needed another green thumb for this garden./Chris
Always feel free to rearrange poetry lines as a critiquing method. I find it the best way to get points across and to suggest alternate edits. In fact, I may make that same one that you demonstrated. The rhyme recommendation is a good one, at least with what you did. I will need to iron out the free verse version first. It will take me time, but I will give it a whirl.
Your 'planting season' really got my chlorophyll pumping, so I decided to try and compose a poem with a plot (pun intended) from various flower/plant names. I am glad that you liked the idea. Thanks much for your time and efforts with this! I needed another green thumb for this garden./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris