02-25-2014, 11:24 PM
The "waiting to share
a sunlit breakfast at a loud and crowded table" bit confuses me. The imagery is great, but what is going on? The girl is dead, right? Is this supposed to mean he'll meet her in Heaven or something?
Had to google "pealing bell" lol. Well done.
I like how you start with an image of walking down stairs...and the poem is kind of shaped like steps. Is this by design? If so...not bad!
a sunlit breakfast at a loud and crowded table" bit confuses me. The imagery is great, but what is going on? The girl is dead, right? Is this supposed to mean he'll meet her in Heaven or something?
Had to google "pealing bell" lol. Well done.
I like how you start with an image of walking down stairs...and the poem is kind of shaped like steps. Is this by design? If so...not bad!
My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!