McClain Beach

[geoff]

Hello 71 degrees. I hope i'm able to offer you something:

McClain Beach

This woman, my wife;
she is near Superior water

Shoaling waves slide
up the beach face, stopping
just short of her bare feet

I fall more in love with
each spilling break

I enjoy the last line so much. "Spilling break" is great; also liked "Superior water".

I wish that the woman in this piece had more agency. Even something along the lines of "she nears Superior water" would give her a more active role.

My only other comment would be changing "slide" to "sliding in the second stanza; it would freeze the moment a bit and give her even more control as she would be performing most of the actions.

Thanks for the read
-geoff