The Wall
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(02-23-2014, 12:38 PM)Jetz Wrote:  The Wall

She looked for the writing
but only a few letters were visable visible
That damn clock commandeered
so much space
and time
without rhyme

though always a reason
no matter the season I think these two are unnecessary lines.
The incessant tic toc
of that fuckin' clock

She'd love to
take a rock
to that God damn clock
but then

there'd be that damn writing.


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I was mistakenly waiting for a rhyme at the end. Woe is me. Try to give these run through before you post them. Some mistakes are inevitable despite how many time you re-read, and others are completely visible. :]

And why not just burn the wall?
I'll be there in a minute.
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The Wall - by Jetz - 02-23-2014, 12:38 PM
RE: The Wall - by ellajam - 02-23-2014, 05:07 PM
RE: The Wall - by newsclippings - 02-24-2014, 07:39 AM
RE: The Wall - by Obadiah Grey - 02-25-2014, 01:36 AM



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