02-19-2014, 05:44 AM
I'm not certain what the intended meaning is, but I did enjoy that poem, as odd as it is, because it has a charming meter to it. I think changing line two to:
I eat my hair like noodles.
Would add some unique dissonance, forcing the reader to slow down and take in the intrinsic beauty of the poem, instead of rushing through it. It also makes for a neat little pseudo-rhyme with solitude.
I eat my hair like noodles.
Would add some unique dissonance, forcing the reader to slow down and take in the intrinsic beauty of the poem, instead of rushing through it. It also makes for a neat little pseudo-rhyme with solitude.
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line