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02-18-2014, 01:33 PM

(02-18-2014, 01:06 PM)kindofahippy Wrote: Line seven seems a bit stressed, maybe "leaving the one thing" would improve rhythm. Other than that, a great tragic poem.

It absolutely improved the rhythm, thank you Smile

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RE: No. 1 - by kingmicahde - 02-18-2014, 11:21 AM

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