02-18-2014, 01:06 PM
Line seven seems a bit stressed, maybe "leaving the one thing" would improve rhythm. Other than that, a great tragic poem.
*Warning: blatant tomfoolery above this line
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RE: No. 1 - by kingmicahde - 02-18-2014, 11:21 AM
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