02-16-2014, 11:32 PM
Hello fogglethorpe, thank you for the reply. I have made an edit above from your comments.
Yes I wanted to give this the feel of a child's perspective, but what this whole stanza is about is someone lay on the ground looking out into space, "mother's cheek" being the ground, "back curves naturally" as talking about the natural curve of the earth. The whole next part was about the stars.
Yeah maybe I need to rethink it, but was going for the whole children of the universe kind of love.
Quote:I’ll lay my breath close to mothers’ cheek, my back curves naturally to her will, my eyes set transfixed,
Lovely images. I assume this is from the perspective of a newborn?
Yes I wanted to give this the feel of a child's perspective, but what this whole stanza is about is someone lay on the ground looking out into space, "mother's cheek" being the ground, "back curves naturally" as talking about the natural curve of the earth. The whole next part was about the stars.
Yeah maybe I need to rethink it, but was going for the whole children of the universe kind of love.