02-14-2014, 10:09 AM
"Also why isn't "woman's" capitalized?" Oversight.
"too?" correct, typo. Good catch.
"though distance?" Should "though distant" good catch.
"The say and away rhyme feels cheap. Purposely?" What do you mean by "cheap"? Do you mean trite?
"word clutter" I would say awkward phrasing, is that what you mean?
"another weird rhyme" How so?
"I'd like to see how you respond first before I continue on with my opinions."
What I would like from you is to tell me your rationale. Such as, if a rhyme is "cheap" what do you mean by that and why is it not a good thing? I appreciate the time you have already spent with this, and if you don't want to spend more time that's fine. However, besides being more beneficial to me, I think it would help you become a better critic. Becoming a better critic also helps you become a better poet, since no one will critique your work more than yourself.
Thanks,
Dale
"too?" correct, typo. Good catch.
"though distance?" Should "though distant" good catch.
"The say and away rhyme feels cheap. Purposely?" What do you mean by "cheap"? Do you mean trite?
"word clutter" I would say awkward phrasing, is that what you mean?
"another weird rhyme" How so?
"I'd like to see how you respond first before I continue on with my opinions."
What I would like from you is to tell me your rationale. Such as, if a rhyme is "cheap" what do you mean by that and why is it not a good thing? I appreciate the time you have already spent with this, and if you don't want to spend more time that's fine. However, besides being more beneficial to me, I think it would help you become a better critic. Becoming a better critic also helps you become a better poet, since no one will critique your work more than yourself.
Thanks,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.