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The Void-First revision
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02-13-2014, 08:39 AM
Okay. Here's what I think I should do based on the feedback. I think I should keep the second half of the first stanza, keep the second and third stanzas and trash the ending because it doesn't seem to work after I've read it. I'm going to rework the parts I keep to focus on one central theme. I'll make those parts more concise and build from them to make better sense.
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The Void-First revision - by ralex003 - 02-06-2014, 08:01 AM
RE: The Void - by Pleasure's all mine - 02-07-2014, 07:32 AM
RE: The Void - by ralex003 - 02-07-2014, 07:35 AM
RE: The Void - by shemthepenman - 02-07-2014, 08:51 AM
RE: The Void - by ralex003 - 02-07-2014, 10:13 AM
RE: The Void - by billy - 02-07-2014, 10:25 AM
RE: The Void - by ChristopherSea - 02-07-2014, 07:52 PM
RE: The Void - by ralex003 - 02-08-2014, 03:29 AM
RE: The Void - by ralex003 - 02-13-2014, 08:39 AM
RE: The Void - by Erthona - 02-13-2014, 09:20 AM
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