02-13-2014, 04:45 AM
Better raw the taste of vision-
perception, unrefined.
Yield to imprecision.
Do not distill the mind.
Make living your ambition:
leave all the rest behind.
You start with a four foot, followed by a three foot line of trochee, so it gives the reader the expectation that, that pattern will continue...it does not. This causes the reader to try and reconnect with that pattern. Doing so causes a shift from the content to the form, not something one generally wants to do.
unrefined-mind-behind
Were you being clever, or was it just happenstance that your rhyming words say the exact opposite of the poem?
As to the content, it is a bit preachy for my taste. I also think that maybe you don't know your subject so well. Most of the history of philosophy deals with man's perception or apprehension of the external world from Plato's idealized objects, John Locke's "Tabula rasa", Kant's "Critique of Pure Reason", and so on up to present day consciousness research. If there is a conclusion, it is the way we make the world intelligible is through distillation (to use your wording), which is to say by referencing past experiences. To understand, we must filter what we see through the baggage of our experience. So yes our view of things is prejudicial, but it is also the only way it is comprehensible. I suppose one could achieve what you suggest by being on a 24/7 acid trip, but I don't think the survival rate would be very good. Human's are incapable of viewing the world objectively because the mechanism that allows that has to have many built in assumptions to work, if not we would take forever to sit down in a chair, for we would not have the faith (from past experience) that it would support us.
Dale
perception, unrefined.
Yield to imprecision.
Do not distill the mind.
Make living your ambition:
leave all the rest behind.
You start with a four foot, followed by a three foot line of trochee, so it gives the reader the expectation that, that pattern will continue...it does not. This causes the reader to try and reconnect with that pattern. Doing so causes a shift from the content to the form, not something one generally wants to do.
unrefined-mind-behind
Were you being clever, or was it just happenstance that your rhyming words say the exact opposite of the poem?
As to the content, it is a bit preachy for my taste. I also think that maybe you don't know your subject so well. Most of the history of philosophy deals with man's perception or apprehension of the external world from Plato's idealized objects, John Locke's "Tabula rasa", Kant's "Critique of Pure Reason", and so on up to present day consciousness research. If there is a conclusion, it is the way we make the world intelligible is through distillation (to use your wording), which is to say by referencing past experiences. To understand, we must filter what we see through the baggage of our experience. So yes our view of things is prejudicial, but it is also the only way it is comprehensible. I suppose one could achieve what you suggest by being on a 24/7 acid trip, but I don't think the survival rate would be very good. Human's are incapable of viewing the world objectively because the mechanism that allows that has to have many built in assumptions to work, if not we would take forever to sit down in a chair, for we would not have the faith (from past experience) that it would support us.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.