triolet

[Arachnid_Poet]

Excellent meter and adherence to form. L6 is ever so slightly touching on cliche, but the refrain is absolutely lovely. L3 gives me a problem with the tenses as it's clearly already started (I'm ok with the present tense in L5 as this is a continuing thing). My suggestion for L3 would be something along the lines of:

We crawled through hands; so such things start

Great triolet, thanks for the read.

hmmm would changing line 3 to your suggestion hurt the meter? Sorry, meter is slowly coming to me. This is my first triolet. Thanks for the comment! I'll probably come back to line six.