Poem #5

[ChristopherSea]

[quote='oxomiya' pid='152709' dateline='1390066851']
Edited S1:

Stared down
By boiling eyes.
Abuses simmering
Delivered warm.

Words emanating
Punches projecting.
Not heard, not felt
But understood.

I smell the fumes
While waiting to burn
In your ire.

I like the edit, but you are missing some punctuation. Removal of the first word caps for each line my serve you better. I am not a fan of placing 'ing' after every verb. It usually weakens their action and 'rings' the ears. Here is a possible edit:

Stared down
by boiling eyes.
Abuses simmer,
delivered warm.

Words emanate,
punches project.
Not heard, not felt,
but understood.

I smell the fumes,
while waiting to burn
in your ire.

I hope this helps. Cheers/Chris