Lying in my room

[makeshift]

Posters fill the olive suede-textured walls,
and books that I like occupy wooden shelves. Does "Wooden" add anything to this line?
My favorite music plays right beside my ear,
and I am quick to take its advice. What advice
My closet overflows with my very own look;
I’ve worked so hard to make it mine.
Works of art (my favorites!)
are pinned to a cork-board that hangs Interesting line break (:
above my study desk.
Upon my dresser, my accomplishments
boast my merit and define my pride.
I don’t fucking know me. don't care much for this ending

Well, I can certainly relate to the narrator here. I think this poem is very clear in what its trying to say, which is good imo imo. The ending to me just comes off as kinda angsty. I would suggest trying to use imagery, such as your doing with the rest of the poem, to express the idea.

Hope that helps,, just my 2 cents, thnx for sharing