02-07-2014, 11:04 AM
Ah, we both have the same situation it seems. Books overflow our living space, music giving us advice to do things a certain way or to boost our morale in a certain sense. We have things that try to define what we are, what we have done, but yet in the mirror we are still utter strangers to ourselves. I'm not a fan of the F word, so I'd remove that word in the last line. But that's my opinion. This poem would be pretty cool if you wrote more metaphorically. I assume your saying your a stranger with among trademarks that have partially defined you. Why not break it down even more and say something like "My trophy says I've won/this race that was never run" etc etc. But that's my two cents. Overall it's a very good piece.