View from a College Window

[71degrees]

A dirty window blocks the wind and rain,
but through it I see their bleak effects
on houses and trees and lawn arrangements.
A rotten rusting white metal chair,
beside its fellows of brotherly creed.
Around a central table, I assume,
though large and ragged trees obscure my view.
Appropriately sad, I think, a lawn
for entertaining guests in summer or
the spring, now wilting darkly in the rain.

By bringing in a narrator, it adds a touch of opinion that isn't needed. The focus should be on the view. Write about the view. The poem is about the view. It's the view. Pronouns add nothing. Why "their?" Why the need to personify? It's the view. "I think" or "I assume" clogs things. I already know you are thinking…SOMEONE is up there. Love the detail. Love the message. Do not like the presentation.