Seagull

[shemthepenman]

A seagull soars still against opposing winds,
stuck in the sky like glitter on glue.
Not moving an inch – how long has it been?
It looks like a check on a backdrop of blue.

Will it try to move on, has it some place to go?
Or does progress stand still, and in stillness progress?
The swarms of us bustle and hustle below,
Bumping and shoving and pushing: distress!

Bound to the ground, we do what we can:
We walk and we run and we sift through the sand,
while that fellow up there could fly over the seas
but takes a small moment to revel in the breeze.

There is something about this poem which is quite pleasant. And as has been mentioned in a previous comment (not sure if I can refer to another comment and all that business, but as the wise man said to the fool, fuck it) it does have the feeling of a painting.

The the glitter glue line was a problem, purely because I am a simple creature and the similie used two different preposition and I went all confusedface.

Also, I found it difficult to see the connection between the first set of questions on the first line of the second stanza, and the second set of questions on the second line of the second stanza. I mean the disjunctive just seems to add an unecesssry element, and seems to me to make both lines (together) meaningless (or, even worse, pretentious.

Also, anthropomorphic stuff can be great. But a seagull 'taking time to revel', I don't know...

Regardless, there is definitely something here, nice concept, and it gives one the over all feeling it is driving at.

Thanks.

Just a ps. When I said about the two different preposition being a problem, I obviously know that a simile can be anything... But for some reason something IN the sky being like something stuck ON glue doesn't seem right. It maybe something to do with the texture. Funnily enough, the opposite sounds ok to me "stuck on the sky like glitter in glue"... Go figure but still, I think "stuck in the sky like glitter in glue" is best (and I cannot help liking the 'glitter in/glittering' pun). Only my opinion, of course