02-05-2014, 09:06 AM
Some very strong imagery in your poem. I like the concrete images - abstract ideas like the facade of a dilemma don't work so well for me.
I like the slant rhymes within the poem. Not keen on the repetition of 'drips' and 'drip drip drip' within a line of each other.
Welcome to the site, keep writing!
I like the slant rhymes within the poem. Not keen on the repetition of 'drips' and 'drip drip drip' within a line of each other.
Welcome to the site, keep writing!