02-03-2014, 07:26 AM
As everyone else is saying, you are centering this poem around its rhymes. Sentence structure is yoda-like due to your need to rhyme on every line. Something I would try is:
I'm certain you on your way
I wish that you would stay
Wither, on the grass, away
Until the end of days
Rhymes arent as forced and the sentences flow more freely. I'm a novice too bud, no worries, but this stanza follows a certain meter too, I believe. The HARD soft syllable one. =]
I'm certain you on your way
I wish that you would stay
Wither, on the grass, away
Until the end of days
Rhymes arent as forced and the sentences flow more freely. I'm a novice too bud, no worries, but this stanza follows a certain meter too, I believe. The HARD soft syllable one. =]