02-01-2014, 09:33 AM
(02-01-2014, 06:38 AM)Keith Wrote: Many thanks,You are spot on Billy and too kind. I will of course consider changing the line as it sounds smoother and clarifies the line as you say , I did have it that way round originally but hat as the end rhyme seem to bump into That on the next line and I thought it seemed a little forced, what do you think ?not sure but i think that's called internal rhyme and an odd internal rhyme can't do any harm :J:
The site and everyone here has so much to offer, and some with outstanding ability so learning is made easy, I know I still have a long way to go so your words are very encouraging and its always nice to write one that people enjoy. Best Keith