01-30-2014, 02:01 PM
First off, Intriguing title. Nice Job There
I believe the poem begins to lose focus in stanza 5, it has a continuous flow and then in 5 the structure adjusts (in my opinion) drastically. The abrupt change made my reading readjusts to your poems content which caused the intake of information to slightly diminish due to mental restructuring.
I believe the poem begins to lose focus in stanza 5, it has a continuous flow and then in 5 the structure adjusts (in my opinion) drastically. The abrupt change made my reading readjusts to your poems content which caused the intake of information to slightly diminish due to mental restructuring.