Poem #5

Poem #5

penguingina
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01-22-2014, 02:13 PM

Interesting, though something must be a bit over my head. Is the "your" from "your ire" the two pots? It seems the narrator switched between two subjects toward which (s)he is speaking. I think it would help finish the poem off if the very last line had a strong adjective.

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Poem #5 - by oxomiya - 01-19-2014, 02:40 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by penguingina - 01-22-2014, 02:13 PM

RE: Poem #5 - by oxomiya - 01-23-2014, 08:56 PM

RE: Poem #5 - by Erthona - 01-23-2014, 11:11 PM

RE: Poem #5 - by ellajam - 01-24-2014, 01:07 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by ChristopherSea - 01-24-2014, 01:24 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by oxomiya - 01-24-2014, 03:34 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by StevenA - 02-05-2014, 09:25 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by Sheep - 02-11-2014, 06:57 PM

RE: Poem #5 - by ChristopherSea - 02-11-2014, 08:28 PM

RE: Poem #5 - by Thatonegirl - 02-23-2014, 09:02 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by AngelOfFire - 02-26-2014, 04:07 AM

RE: Poem #5 - by Bahdriel - 02-27-2014, 01:22 AM

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