Rejected (Version 1)
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Quote:Hiding in the house,
I had lived in for many years.
would probably suffice clarity wise, without a pronoun at the start it's likely that you are talking about yourself anyway, and you've done enough given that there's more lines to come.
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Rejected (Version 1) - by Mikeodial - 01-21-2014, 10:40 PM
RE: Rejected - by Erthona - 01-22-2014, 12:39 AM
RE: Rejected - by clemonz - 01-22-2014, 05:01 AM
Rejected v1 - by Mikeodial - 01-22-2014, 10:41 PM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by Zainabk - 01-29-2014, 11:06 AM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by Mikeodial - 01-29-2014, 08:58 PM
RE: Rejected (Version 1)q - by tomoffing - 01-29-2014, 09:29 PM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by Mikeodial - 01-29-2014, 10:23 PM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by tomoffing - 01-30-2014, 06:57 AM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by alatos - 01-30-2014, 01:46 AM
RE: Rejected (Version 1) - by 5th Flow Boy - 01-30-2014, 01:41 PM



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