really plased with this short poem

[clemonz]

i thought of white noise as the last line and it sort of worked.

cool, i listen to lots of static noise.

thanks for the suggestions above, the noise was also meant as an allusion to a poem i read by o'hara when he says that the poet must "must save me from the world's external noise" - which seems to be a complaint about talking about the scenery.

i didn't really think out the poem TBH, just liked how it sounded and the last clause in that context

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I was also wondering if you really mean "gum stuck next to the keyboard."? or "gum sits next to the keyboard."?
Using both seems redundant.

well i don't think it is redundant, no.

gum can sit somewhere without being unwrapped.
and "gum stuck by the keyboard" is a completely different sentence to "gum is stuck by the keyboard", and in this context it would make the last line more flat.