01-21-2014, 05:35 AM
Brownlie,
Thank you for your comment, however I you need to be more specific about which "adjectives are bothering you."
"let events and images describe themselves so the reader can discover the underlying themes."
That's a tad vague, as this is written in the first person narrative what you are suggesting, that I change the voice? I don't see that it draws all that many conclusions for the reader, so you will need to be more specific if you want a response, which I would be happy to give once I understand what you mean.
Thanks again,
Dale
Thank you for your comment, however I you need to be more specific about which "adjectives are bothering you."
"let events and images describe themselves so the reader can discover the underlying themes."
That's a tad vague, as this is written in the first person narrative what you are suggesting, that I change the voice? I don't see that it draws all that many conclusions for the reader, so you will need to be more specific if you want a response, which I would be happy to give once I understand what you mean.
Thanks again,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.