01-20-2014, 04:23 AM
seems overly rhetorical - lots of questions that don't get answered anyway - as well as the summation in three lines.
which seems odd coupled with the immediacy of the part rhyme of firm with overturned (a nice rhyme actually).
not necessarily a bad thing though.
"left / on silent feet" sounds ok, but i can't see what force you add by saying that whoever brought the oranges had feet?
quietly impressed
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which seems odd coupled with the immediacy of the part rhyme of firm with overturned (a nice rhyme actually).
not necessarily a bad thing though.
"left / on silent feet" sounds ok, but i can't see what force you add by saying that whoever brought the oranges had feet?
quietly impressed
!