Sienna at Burnt Twilight

[Codry]

Thanks Codry,

What problem do you have with the word "sickled"?

What do you mean by "Use capitals at the beginning of every word from the verse."?

Thanks again for your comments.

Dale

"sick" is not a verb to end it with ed
sickled it's not a word per see after all it does not exist in the dictionary
Maybe sickened which is an adverb.

Frankly that's a rule in poetry, to start with a word that has a capital. Otherwise it will look like you ran out space to write it on the previous row.

A capital will always announce the beginning of a new verse.

I long for her eyes
to be surprised.

I believe this down here is much better

I long for her eyes
To be surprised.

Talking about "so close and so far away" cliche theme that you commented upon my poem .... your whole poem it's about just that ... isn't that ironic? don't you think, Alanis ?lol