Off sick-- edit 2

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You can think about line breaks maybe being different, but something like:

twisting while trying
to keep ten toes from turning
into small frozen cherries
my sisters would eat
on scorching days
far from this.

or

twisting while trying
to keep ten toes from turning
into small frozen cherries
my sisters used to eat
on scorching days
far from this one.


Just examples of big changes that aren't very drastic.