haiku sort of by inferior human

haiku sort of by inferior human

FancifulDreamer
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01-15-2014, 05:01 PM

I like this haiku in the original form. It provides a decent contrast. I think maybe different descriptive words should be used [for the second line] because, in my opinion, both are gentle, but the dog is playful rather than gentle. Just my thought. Smile

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haiku sort of by inferior human - by cheyrn - 01-15-2014, 03:44 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by ellajam - 01-15-2014, 04:17 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-15-2014, 04:21 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by billy - 01-15-2014, 04:23 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by FancifulDreamer - 01-15-2014, 05:01 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-17-2014, 01:34 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by FancifulDreamer - 01-17-2014, 01:41 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-17-2014, 01:44 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by ellajam - 01-17-2014, 08:01 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-17-2014, 10:23 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by ChristopherSea - 01-17-2014, 10:29 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-17-2014, 11:11 PM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by ChristopherSea - 01-18-2014, 12:28 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-19-2014, 10:19 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by ellajam - 01-19-2014, 11:42 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by just mercedes - 01-19-2014, 11:07 AM

RE: Haiku that references a dog and a bird - by cheyrn - 01-19-2014, 11:31 AM

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