01-15-2014, 02:46 PM
In a word...lovely!
(01-15-2014, 07:21 AM)justcloudy Wrote: I went through a full box of tissues today.
Now giant cotton popcorn overflows
a pail-turned-trashcan, resting
Already been said, but describing discarded tissues as giant popcorn is very clever. I can see the image vividly.
where my feet would be if they weren't
curled over orange plush,
twisting around each other, struggling
to keep ten toes from turning
into small frozen cherries,
I have diabetes, and my feet are always cold. This describes it perfectly for me.
like the ones my sisters love to eat
on scorching days,
far away from this one.
Your ending I think is my most favorite here. One simple, succinct line describing how you feel about the day. No long, drawn out stanzas that over describe without adding anything. Very nice. I enjoyed the read very much.