your poem isn't very good, people are trying to say it in a nice way but you're not allowing them too.
while there are a couple of decent lines init. most of it is pretty mundane and flat.
She is beautiful, sexy, and you can not help but lust
She is gorgeous, attractive, and will make your mind gust
the above two lines are indicative of poets who haven't yet learnt enough of the craft to see they're very very weak. the rhymes are forced and many of the words carry no thought or idea. what is beautiful, what is gorgeous? my dog's gorgeous. my shoes are attractive. tell us how or why she's gorgeous.
you have two options as i see it, argue your point which most will see as pointless (because of the poems quality), or try to learn and understand what's being said to you and why. we're not attacking you, far from it, we want you and your poetry to improve.
while there are a couple of decent lines init. most of it is pretty mundane and flat.
She is beautiful, sexy, and you can not help but lust
She is gorgeous, attractive, and will make your mind gust
the above two lines are indicative of poets who haven't yet learnt enough of the craft to see they're very very weak. the rhymes are forced and many of the words carry no thought or idea. what is beautiful, what is gorgeous? my dog's gorgeous. my shoes are attractive. tell us how or why she's gorgeous.
you have two options as i see it, argue your point which most will see as pointless (because of the poems quality), or try to learn and understand what's being said to you and why. we're not attacking you, far from it, we want you and your poetry to improve.