Escape (a sonnet)

[tomoffing]

Very solid starting point pinsir.
Are we chasing cars or looking for lyrics??

the stark Volta works excellently, but your couplet could be more succinct.

Some thoughts below.

Thanks a lot,

There's a not-so-subtle song lyric smuggled in here. In fact, it's that song that inspired this sonnet. Bonus points if you can spot it.

Escape

The young are sold and never seen again
as zealots bomb and terrorize the towns.
Pandemics spread and scatter death around,
and woe to man as climate change begins! Great opening, but this line is clumsy in comparison with the first 3. "And woe to human's climate changing sin" maybe.
The threat of nukes that melt the bone from skin really powerful image. Spine chilling
are made by men who've bought and sold the crown.
Humanity, in whole, is going down lost your meter here a touch.
as Satan shows his cold and calloused grin. Strong alliteration. Might be just my mouth but "Cold and calloused grin" actually pulls my expression to that exactly. Brilliant.
For precious instants, though, I can escape-
a sanctuary in your auburn eyes meter again here
where I can lay and just forget the world.
With you I'm free, reality reshaped
into a blissful, pure, and perfect guise
where fear and fate and love are loosely blurred.