Fourth Edit - The Fearful Age

Fourth Edit - The Fearful Age

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12-29-2013, 09:31 AM

Wow. That last line really caught me. Hell of an ending!
My only problem with your poem is that the first stanza has wonderful, subtle alliteration throughout. Then, it just kinda stops Sad

Bonus points for a creative rhyme scheme!

My name is Ozymandias, King of Kings:
Look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!

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Fourth Edit - The Fearful Age - by beaufort - 12-19-2013, 01:06 AM

RE: The Fearful Age - by bena - 12-19-2013, 02:43 AM

RE: The Fearful Age - by beaufort - 12-19-2013, 03:13 AM

RE: The Fearful Age - by 71degrees - 12-24-2013, 05:49 AM

RE: First Edit - The Fearful Age - by Farkas - 12-29-2013, 01:42 AM

RE: First Edit - The Fearful Age - by ThePinsir - 12-29-2013, 09:31 AM

RE: First Edit - The Fearful Age - by ChessPiece - 12-29-2013, 11:06 AM

RE: First Edit - The Fearful Age - by beaufort - 12-29-2013, 12:14 PM

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