12-29-2013, 01:42 AM
Hi 
A very well written offering that I enjoyed very much. I did have to read the poem twice to get the proper meter; even than, the words, though eloquent, reveal the rhyme grudgingly. This offering is far better than my observations would suggest. Perhaps a revised format and clearer punctuation might solve the problem.
I know what it is. the structure is 1,2,3,4,2. Once I worked that out and reread the poem the flow was much more obvious.
A very well written offering that I enjoyed very much. I did have to read the poem twice to get the proper meter; even than, the words, though eloquent, reveal the rhyme grudgingly. This offering is far better than my observations would suggest. Perhaps a revised format and clearer punctuation might solve the problem.
I know what it is. the structure is 1,2,3,4,2. Once I worked that out and reread the poem the flow was much more obvious.
“Do not squander time, life is made of it.”