12-22-2013, 11:03 AM
Two of your poems reminded me of his. Especially the line breaks. I thought this poem was pretty good as it is, others might not think so. I don't like Robert Creeley all that much.
I've read it many times and can't find anything to say to improve it because I don't think it needs to improve even if it isn't the best poem in the world, and it would bore me if it was much better. I like the fragmented style and how it rushes along. I like the look of it. How it manages a fast gliding pace while compressing everything. The emphasis the first and last words have as they frame each line.
I've read it many times and can't find anything to say to improve it because I don't think it needs to improve even if it isn't the best poem in the world, and it would bore me if it was much better. I like the fragmented style and how it rushes along. I like the look of it. How it manages a fast gliding pace while compressing everything. The emphasis the first and last words have as they frame each line.