12-19-2013, 09:33 PM
Thank you for the feedback. I agree it drops off where you both pointed out. The lines about coming to find you and spreading of wings are just really bad examples of cryptic double entendre. My wife caught it and said I was writing smut, haha. It's all a bit sarcastic for sure, in a way.
Also, I don't mind that you put your own twist on it, netjoy. For me, it would just feel too forced and too serious if it was worked that way. Thank you to you both.
Also, I don't mind that you put your own twist on it, netjoy. For me, it would just feel too forced and too serious if it was worked that way. Thank you to you both.