Alleyway, revision 1

[lucentwavering]

The skin on her knuckles cracked red
matches her darting eyes,
as she mutters under her felt blanket.
It still has patches that aren't worn down
to threadbare strands huddled together
hanging on to their meaning of life.

It's a nice sentiment, but it's a little wordy for what you are trying to portray. Her life is threadbare and the language should reflect this. The first two lines in particular get a little limericky with trisyllabic feet. I would try something like 'The cracked knuckles match/ her red eyes'. Then in the last line I strongly recommend not saying 'meaning of life.' Maybe: There are patches/ not threadbare, hanging/ to meaning. Try to take the basic shape of this and say this same thing using as few words as possible. See what you can find.