Feral Child (a triolet)
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(12-16-2013, 04:01 PM)billy Wrote:  without out the title it wouldn't make much sense so it works in that respect.
i like that you slightly changed the last line but you left it half a foot short (i think)
a good effort.
doesn't it mess up the iambic tetrameter ?

and now we're going to discuss it instead of the poem just forget i said anything
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Feral Child (a triolet) - by HalfOpenArms - 12-16-2013, 12:45 PM
RE: Feral Child (a triolet) - by billy - 12-16-2013, 04:01 PM
RE: Feral Child (a triolet) - by trueenigma - 12-16-2013, 04:18 PM
RE: Feral Child (a triolet) - by billy - 12-16-2013, 07:08 PM
RE: Feral Child (a triolet) - by cidermaid - 12-16-2013, 05:43 PM
RE: Feral Child (a triolet) - by bena - 12-17-2013, 10:56 PM



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