12-16-2013, 04:18 PM
(12-16-2013, 04:01 PM)billy Wrote: without out the title it wouldn't make much sense so it works in that respect.No, all the feet are there if you read "child" as two syllables, which is fine, and works best for my ear anyway.
i like that you slightly changed the last line but you left it half a foot short (i think)
a good effort.
L6 is painful though (gath'rer).

