The Rabbit Trail

[ellajam]

Hi, I enjoyed this, here are a few notes.

The sunless sky just after snow I think this captures that moment well, through "limbs"
has long since plastered pounds of sleet
on burdened limbs. The cars aglow
with ice; the field a vast, white sheet. I know this look, but I'm still not a fan of "aglow" or "sheet"
The paw prints of a wild hare
are faintly dimpled on the crust. clear and lovely
They fade, then vanish in the glare,
and slowly fill with winter’s dust. I like these two lines, especially "winter's dust"
I follow, walking next a drift, "walking next a drift" made me stumble, walk along a drift?
which shifts and fades: a phantom knoll, beautiful, effective two lines
its crest cut with a narrow rift.
And there, I spot the rabbit’s hole.
I peer inside the tunneled space:
the rodent squeals and bites my face. You've turned this beauty into a joke, your prerogative, but a disappointment for me

I hope you don't mind the line by line, there's so much in here that works so well, I wanted to point out the few weak spots.